Writing class
Mr. Readron
Ji Hyeon Kim
August 4th, 2011
In order to improve your English, you and your classmates must decide to attend one of the summer camps listed below. Take a careful look at each of them, think about some of the good and bad points and choose one.
Prompt: Write compare and contrast essay about 'Camp Big Apple', 'Ranch West Camp' 'Head Start Splash'.
Mr. Readron
Ji Hyeon Kim
August 4th, 2011
In order to improve your English, you and your classmates must decide to attend one of the summer camps listed below. Take a careful look at each of them, think about some of the good and bad points and choose one.
Prompt: Write compare and contrast essay about 'Camp Big Apple', 'Ranch West Camp' 'Head Start Splash'.
Compare and Contrast Camps
My group Hyun Ji, Yun Ji, and I compared and contrast 'Ranch West Camp' with another camp, 'Camp Big Apple'. However there were three otions: Camp Big Apple, Ranch West Camp, and Head Strat Splash. We talked about why we all choose Ranch West to go. As Camp Big Apple and Ranch West camp have different names, they will have differences, and similarities.
To compare two camps there is one point that both camps are same: they go out door activities. This is good for students because if they need to rest, they can rest by experiencing new things. if we go to Camp Big Apple, we can do city tour, go to museums, and go to Broadway show and if we go to Ranch West Camp, we do horse back riding, river rafting, hiking, canoeing, and mountain biking.
To contrast Camp Big Apple and Ranch West camp I have two points. There are different vecause students live at different places whill they are joining thosetwo camps. Moreover, their studing styles are different. In Camp Big Apple they study intensively in math and vocabulary. This program is good for students because math and English is really important for us but we will be bored quickly. In contrast, when we go to Ranch West camp, we can select what subject we want to learn. Also we can experience new things that we never did in urban communities. Even though if we can select subject that we want to study, we cannot learn other subects that we really need to study.
Camp Big Apple and Ranch West camp are similar because they go to outdoor activities and also they are diffferent because students stay at different places when they join two camps, and their studing styles are different. If I can go to one of this camp after GLPS camp, I will still go to Ranch West camp because I want to experience a life in rural Canada.
Camp Big Apple and Ranch West camp are similar because they go to outdoor activities and also they are diffferent because students stay at different places when they join two camps, and their studing styles are different. If I can go to one of this camp after GLPS camp, I will still go to Ranch West camp because I want to experience a life in rural Canada.
Nice, I like the way you are trying to use the transition words.
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